meh...the concept is ok, but the spelling isn't really good. It should be: 1st ability: "Tap all permanents target opponent controls" 2nd ability: "Target opponent looses 3 life for every tapped pemanent he or she controls." 3rd ability: "Target opponent losses X life, were X is the number of tapped permanents he or she control multiplied by three."
But, if you wanted to really screw the guy, the 3rd ability should be "Target opponent sacrifices all tapped permanents he or she controls." Just suggesting.